Your Home (Act 1, Scene 11)

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Act 1, Scene 11

MELI

(As Dad) “Well, I think I know what to expect of him; that’s good.”

That’s what Dad told me before he, miraculously, let us go without much of a fight.

At one point I explained the living-inside-our-heads situation to Mom and I’m pretty sure that at that moment she took it as me confirming that I no longer just did drugs, I also sold them as well.

Dad didn’t care, as long as I eventually came out of it in one piece ready to inherit the business and, by some miracle, take charge. That did not happen, I’ll spoil that much, and not for me wanting to disappoint him, I’ve never wanted that.

The only real wrinkle was that my allowance would be cut off, since they supposed that in the magical world of cranial housing we’d be saving a pretty penny on taxes (which wasn’t wrong, but still stung).

It was a real confusing time for my Mom, in part because Fede’s docile and kind demeanor was apparently too out of character for me, which –come on, man! My taste in partners couldn’t have been that terrible.

She had the decency to admit that my grandparents –her parents, had the same jitters when they met my dad, which I thought was a different situation than this one; young Dad was… young Dad. One thing that she couldn’t stop herself from saying was that if I was so intent on doing charity work I could have just helped with her philanthropy. I responded that I was quite happy living my life without comparing bank accounts with others. She shut my mouth by saying:

(As Mom) “You can say that cause you’re the one with the money.”

¡POW!, right on the smoocher.

(As Mom) “Imelda, you are –or are on your way to being a grown woman, find yourself a project for you to work on. It’s that or becoming part of someone else’s project.”

By the look she had when she said that, I knew she was talking from experience.

            END OF SCENE


One response to “Your Home (Act 1, Scene 11)”

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    Anonymous

    “At one point…I’ve never wanted that.”

    These words cover some pretty incredible moments that I think should be put into dialog…telling her parents that they can travel into each others’ heads, this seems like a conversation that would tell us more about the relationships between all of them, and I’m also curious as to how exactly it would play out. Also, the business that she is supposed to run…maybe tell me about it a bit more. The tension between mother and daughter about the choice of partners tells us a lot about what their relationship has been like leading up to this point in a short amount of words, I feel like the discussion about admitting they engage in cranial housing (which, by the way, is a great term. I would use it more often, quite often. It encapsulates the mental aspect of going into each others’ minds with the physical realities each mind exhibits) should have at least some more language in this spirit, if not an entire scene.

    The more that I read, I realize that you reveal a great deal about your characters by what is left unsaid in the interactions. For example, between the mother and daughter in this scene, my mind can fill in a lot of blanks about what their relationship has been up to this point based on their dialog. This is very strong, and really engages me in their story because it makes my mind fill in between the margins, but the dialog effictively suggests what my mind must put in. I think this, coupled with maybe some more physical descriptions, makes for a very concise and strong (and unique) writing style that would be exceptional for any person writing.

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